Sunday, February 16, 2014

Some Nights

Desperate Valor
Dale Gallon's Desperate Valor, 1988 

The sun is setting 
A palette of crimson, orange, and purple 
Gloomy and ominous
Shots fired
The smell of gunpowder permeates through the air
The battlefield already marred with bodies of the fallen
A cloud of smoke
There are footsteps
The footsteps of a stampede
A gradual crescendo
The time is near, the time has come
For one, failure
One step closer to nothing
Turmoil
For the other, glory and redemption, 
One step closer to the cause
A lifestyle 

The troop emerges from the cloud of smoke
Like a stampede of horses
The bright red Confederate flag
Dances with the wind 
The commander spearheads his troop, saber in hand
His face speaks of valor
What does he stand for?
He has lived a life of pain
He has lost everything
His family
His home
His glory 
A life of struggle
All surmounting to this final charge
The chance to bring glory and redemption
To the cause he fights for
To his nation
His troop is ready
What do they stand for?
Each soldier has his own story 
Each a story of pain 
A story of suffering
Fighting for their life
Fighting for the lifestyle of their people 
One solider lost his father to a slave revolt
Another saw his village burn in a raid 
Another saw his closest companion shot by a Union soldier 
Each a different story
A different pain 
A sharp sword penetrating the heart of the soldiers
Behind the troop lies their dead companions 
Those who died fighting for their same cause 

The Union Soldier hides behind the log 
He knows his end is near 
Terrified
Looking around 
He sees the dead bodies of his companions 
What is he fighting for? 
What does he stand for? 
At this point 
He is not even sure
His enemies are fighting for their way of life
But what is he on the battlefield for?
To deny his enemies of this lifestyle? 
The lives of men he will never know or understand?
Turmoil 
His inner uncertainty stings his heart
Maybe this is all a dream
Surreal
What does he stand for?
But the end is near for this lone soldier
He thinks of his family
His mother
His father
His sister
Everything he has sacrificed for them
His mother's tears watching her little baby leave the homestead
His father's tears for his son's bravery and devotion to his nation
His sister's tears as she saw him fade away into the horizon
Their beautiful faces speak of innocence
Their tears speak of pain and suffering
Grief
Anguish
Suddenly
He knows what his cause is
What he stands for 
Suddenly
A sharp pain permeates the soldiers side
He has been shot
The physical pain
Ephemeral
The emotional pain
Eternal 
He hears the sound of the drum for retreat
He struggles to keep his eyes open
The image of his mother's tears flashes into his eyes one last time
He has failed her
The emotional pain
Unbearable
A tear trickles down his coarse chin
Her baby will not come home 
The sun has set

4 comments:

  1. This is extremely well written Jason. I really like your use of short sentences. This evokes the sharp shots heard on a battlefield. Also, I notice how you started your poem by saying the sun is "setting" and ended your poem by saying the sun has "set". Nice use of the word ephemeral, very inspired.

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  2. Love the parallel structure and short sentences! The shift between Union/Confederacy POV's was great, and rhetorical questions were used effectively.

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  4. I really liked this poem, Jason! It is VERY well written. The verisimilitude created anticipation! I really loved how you used the short sentences to foster the image of war. Normally I hate poetry, but this was awesome! Great job!

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